雅思作文如何一招突破7分


考PTE可以,但说实话PTE是个玄学,一次刷7炸8炸的人多但N考不过的人也多。到底应否彻底倒向PTE,真的看个人性格风格和适应程度。


习惯了雅思的,在澳洲还读了几年书,基础还不错的人,基本雅思8分就卡在作文上。要不推倒重来去整PTE,死去活来,要不继续赌一把雅思,拿下作文。





雅思作文光背模板,搞八股,卡7卡8是常态。


想想一下,考官每天能看到多少篇背模板克隆的文章?你如果是他,你会松手给这些模板文7分8分吗?


想要不卡7分卡8分,不做万年6分6.5作文苦主,先了解一个概念:


TASK RESPONSE


雅思作文里四大评分标准之一,也是最被忽视的一个。


举个例子,今年3月作文题:

Some people think it is one of the best ways to solve the environmental problems by increasing the cost of fuels for cars and other vehicles .


To what extent do you agree or disagree?


一起看看某个高分“范文”模板:


第一段:


Increasing number of people have regarded environmental degradation as one of the main challenges that humans have to meet in the 21st century.And some argue that this disturbing problem can be alleviated , to some extent, by raising the cost of fuels. Whether this will resolve the problem is very unlikely as automobiles,which are indispensable for people's daily life , are not expected to reduce due to the expensive fuel cost. In fact ,I do not believe this is the best or only way to protect the environment.


常见的高分“范文”语言一般都很漂亮,句式多变复杂,解决了文字词汇和结构的问题,但考生本人无论模板背了多少遍,写的多么熟,不解决Task response这个死结,分数还是卡住。


比如上述这个“范文”,很明显故意背诵使用了很“复杂”的句式,从第一段就故意用了一些有“难度”的单词,比如degradation和indispenable,企图用语文本身拿到作文的高分,但关键问题是,红色字的部分,根据雅思评分Task response的标准,全部存疑,先不讨论文字如何高大上与否,从文章第一段表达观点倒向开始,就已经存在没有完整准确回答题目问题的严重瑕疵,是我们常犯的错误。


看看雅思官方给的Task response评分标准吧。别的不说,就7分和8分作文第一条,address all parts of the task, sufficiently!


完整充分地回答题目的所有内容!




回头来看看题目,题目的关键词我们用蓝色表示,再比对一下上面“范文”的红色字词?(然后逻辑上缺乏说服力的词,是另一个问题,我们用绿色表示)


Some people think it is one of the best ways to solve the environmental problems by increasing the cost of fuels for cars and other vehicles.


To what extent do you agree or disagree?



Increasing number of people have regarded environmental degradation as one of the main challenges that humans have to meet in the 21st century. And some argue that this disturbing problem can be alleviated , to some extent, by raising the cost of fuels. Whether this will resolve the problem is very unlikely as automobiles,which are indispensable for people's daily life , 2 are not expected to reduce due to the expensive fuel cost. In fact ,I do not believe 3 this is the best or only way to protect the environment.


题目问的是泛指的环境问题,文章红色1号位莫名可能背了个酷炫的词提出的却是"环境退化”,跟task不同(概念收窄);


题目问的是是否能solve解决环境问题,而文章红色2号位回答加燃油费不能“减少汽车的数量”,这个明显只是个人脑补,题目并没有直接问是否减少汽车的数量。


题目问的是是否one of the best ways,而文章红色3号位回答这不是the best or only way,这个回答的立场又偏离了题目。题目问是否办法之一,你回答说不是最好或唯一的办法,明显歪楼了。


简单说:不能歪楼!




大部分考生都非常容易犯这个错误:拿到题目就开始拼命写,倒向一个角度就脑补,比如上述“范文”,无论文章写得多么华丽,别说作文8分,7分都够呛,因为第一个评分标准Task response达不到,就已经有卡7分的危险。


btw: 绿色的文字就是明显的逻辑谬误了,把楼歪得更厉害,触犯了评分标准里要求的“relevant”这个要求,“越来越多人”、“21世纪”、“汽车在日常生活不可或缺”这些概念,和题目的task基本没有实际关联的基础,考官可以认为与中心无关,irrelevant从而扣分。


来看一个另外一个背诵了“高级模板”并“堆砌了辞藻”,但并没有“歪楼”的正确例子。


It is widely accepted that one of the highest priorities today is to find a solution to the various environmental problems facing mankind. In response to this, some people has suggested the increase of fuel’s price to demotivate users and ameliorate the situation. Convinced by well-grounded reasons, the author believes that while such an idea is feasible and may yield immediate benefits, it is long from a complete adequate solution.


强调了“之一”,对应的也是泛指的environmental problems,然后继续沿用some people, 没有过分拓宽或收窄范围; 只说了“改善”这个状况,对应了题目的“解决问题”,进一步维持了逻辑范畴,没有跳跃到其他脑补的情形。然后结论是否定此solution,认为其远不够完美,回答了"to what extent"的题目问法。


结论:雅思作文冲7冲8,冲7炸8炸移民第一步,严格扣题Task Response,绝不扩大或缩小逻辑范畴,不脑补不歪楼!





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